Free writing a story

There was a man that loved ice cream. He loved ice cream so much that he would have it for every single meal, breakfast lunch and dinner. His favourite ice cream was a big double cherry and vanilla cone with crunchy peanut chunks and a flake on top. Although this was his favourite there were so many other ice cream flavours out there that he was crazy about. Sometimes at night he would have wild dreams about giant mango sorbets and raspberry and white chocolate Vienetta dancing around him and then slowly closing in on him and wrapping him up in their frozen deliciousness.

(105 words)

Edited version:

There was a man that loved ice cream. He had it for breakfast lunch and dinner. His favourite was a double cherry and vanilla cone with crunchy peanut chunks and a flake. There were other flavours that he loved. Sometimes at night he had wild dreams about giant mango sorbets; raspberry and white chocolate Vienetta dancing around him, closing in on him, and wrapping him up.

(68 words)

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